I'm not able to review
First add a working loader, that makes it possible to look at you're creation actually
Much effort, not much result
I like some parts but most of the parts just don't like
You can see that this took a long time to make. But you can also see that you aren't able to turn this all effort in a nice looking result. First of all, I don't like the style. I like sketchy style though. But this is rushed semi-sketch style. I know that the style you used takes more time than just collour it, And I even noticed some nice shadow work, but most of the time it is not done with the attention needed. The brush u used was a little bit to big sometimes. Animation can be very cool if you don't know how it is made. You recognice every brushstroke in your work.
Another thing. You said that you know that "there are a few mistakes with movements and everything". I agree, only there aren't a few mistakes, almost the whole movie is made out of mistakes. Walkcycles that doesn't walk the way they should. (even though I think you did take some time to study the way animals walk.) Your lines aren't smooth and mostly because of that the movements are not smooth, and therefore look crappy. I don't know if you used a tablet, If you didn't, you should, because that makes your lines a lot more on the right place most of the times. I like frame by frame work, some FbF animation in this movie wasn't to bad, but mainly because the lines were wobbly, it just didn't look right.
Another thing (again). The timing. Animation where you use voices is very difficult to make it sound right. You're timing is a little bit strange. Some parts look okay. But most of the time you wait to long. Especially in the conversations, and change in the moods of the characters. You should try to expiriment a little bit more with the timing, and if you think: yeah, that's right, you must keep it that way. Critic frome people around the corner are always helpfull. Timing is one of the most important things of animation. I know this, because I make the same mistakes as you do. Animation with voice-actors isn't a thing for me (yet). Lip sync was okay, but could have been better. The voice-actors could do a little more emotion in there voice. Oh and always add some backgroundsound, that would help. Anothere animation rule: if you change cameraview, don't make the character in first shot as big as the one in the second shot. Some camera angles you used where very good though.
The last thing. This is just a thing that I don't like about it, I know a lot of people around NG do like this sort of stuff. But I don't like the characters. I know you have seen the Lion King, And I know you like it. I also know you will say, that this is totally different, but I think this is just a Lion King rip off. I know that there are giant Cults around these things who like to make fan-art and create 'own' lions, but I don't see the creativity in that sort of stuff.
I don't want to discourage you, on the contrary. I can see you are able to put much effort in a animation, more than the avarage animator on newgrounds. But you need some feed-back on your work to improve it I think. A big production lik this would be much better than.
Good luck with it!
Well, thanks for your input on this, Grabbelfont. I'll read your comment over a few times, and consider making some more changes to my movie....I was planning on doing that anyway. :)
The animation didn't add anything to the audio
Animation is bad, Lipsync is bad. And no originality at all. Drawings were also bad. Please it isn't very difficult to take a excisting audio clip. And draw a little figure and move the mouth a bit. Okay, you moved some other parts of his body and the background. So you showed me that you can animate and draw a bit. But I think you should do more with that 'talent'(should I call it talent?) than just i take a GTA radio fragment and draw a little bit. If you added something with the animation, something that you wouldn't expect. than it would be better. If you think you could do better, keep on going. If you think this was good, please don't
hmmm... but... pfff
Okay, you made this because you were bored, and the song was good. The song was good, you got bored while making, I got bored while viewing
come on, peoples feet don't go up and down like that when they move. The story wasn't new. Like 20% of all NG movies are about superbadguys and some crazy demon and fighting. (I even made something like that) You could improve your drawingskills. The music was good, and you know how to tell a story, You could follow the whole (not very good) storyline.
I hate that song! But I liked the animation. I don't really get the story, I think the song ruled over the animation and that's a shame because the animation shouldn't be overruled by such crapy music. Sometimes it wasn't very smooth and fluent. But it's clear that you are a good animator!
i agree with everything you said. I don't really love the music either but we are a Beijing based studio so were aiming at a Chinese audience and generally they love cute. Anyway, thanks for the comments.
Het is een goed verhaaltje en het komt duidelijk over. De geluiden die je eronder gezet zijn zijn ook superleuk, vooral dat 'klik' 'bliep' leuk gedaan allemaal
hehe tnx ;p
goede lipsync, animatie is ook wel okeej, het verhaal, ja het is natuurlijk niet nodig bij zo'n test, maar het verhaal is dan ook niks.
goed frame voor frame werk en ook nog een aardig verhaaltje. Je weet muziek en beeld hier goed te combineren. De dikke zwarte brush is hier wel erg aanwezig. Maar het is een goed filmpje
Dit is al een stuk beter dan de vorige filmpjes die ik heb gezien van je. Het verhaal is leuk. Maar daarbij moet ik wel zeggen dat het blam-portal-NG onderwerp al behoorlijk uitgemolken is. Al weet ik niet of dat 5 jaar geleden ook zo was. Je animatie is ook een stuk beter. Het frame voor frame werk ziet er goed uit. Wat dunnere lijnen hadden misschien beter geweest
Als een proefje vind ik hem aardig goed. Het is meer een soort van cut-out binnen flash dan een typische flash-animatie. De bewegingen hadden alleen iets meer samenhang met het gesprek te maken kunnen hebben en de verhoudingen zijn ook een beetje gek.
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